Towards the orginal query - I am also unable to locate any examples to show me what others have done for the statement.
From what I've found, it only appears to be just a statement, with bullet points of awards and acomplishments, both Scout and non-Scouting related. Anything that points toward 'leadership'
Regarding the 5 page document a Scoutmaster recommended be re-written- I'd like to see that document. As a Scoutmaster, I feel one of my responsibilities is to help guide the boys. A meandering 5 pager, filled with words to just to fill a page, would cause me pause as well. Hopefully, he was sparing just the lad from looking like the fool.